Критика резюме и cover letter для США

Всем привет!

Где-то здесь на форуме мелькал вопрос про использование сервисов для написания резюме. Я воспользовался одним из них, и был очень доволен самим процессом (много о себе вспомнил, например). Касательно результата:
Хотелось бы, чтобы знающие учасники форума оценили качество, и может быть что-то подсказали исправить (после выкладывания резюме звонки идут, но многие, как и следовало ожидать, не хотят ждать H1B).

Заранее спасибо!

Резюме:

NAME
ADDRESS
Kiev, Ukraine
Phone: +1 (650) XXXXXXXXX
E-mail: XXXXXX@gmail.com

PROFILE
A Software Engineer and a Doctor of Mathematics with ten years of software development work experience, specializing in developing
windows applications, defining requirements, creating prototypes, and managing proof of concepts during full life-cycle implementation,
testing and maintenance.

[ul]
[li] Developed applications using C#, SQL, WCF, WPF, ADO.NET, WinForms, .NET Remoting, COM/DCOM, C/C++.
[/li][li] Experienced in HTML5/CSS/JS and Amazon Web Services
[/li][li] Experienced in Object-Oriented Design and Programming.
[/li][li] Created and maintained Standalone and Client-Server architectures powered by Microsoft platforms.
[/li][li] Fluent in English, Russian, and Ukrainian, conversational in German.
[/li][/ul]

EDUCATION
Doctor of Philosophy (Ph.D.), Mathematics Graduated September 2007
Kiev Taras Shevchenko National University Kiev, Ukraine

Master of Science (M.S.), Mathematics Graduated March 2003
University of Kaiserslautern Kaiserslautern, Germany
Specialization: Algebric Geometry/Computer Algebra

Master of Science (M.S.), Mathematics Graduated June 2001
Kiev Taras Shevchenko National University Kiev, Ukraine
Specialization: Algebra and Number Theory

WORK EXPERIENCE
Senior Software Engineer August 2006 – Present
Artsyl Technologies Inc (Canada based company) Kiev, Ukraine

  • [li] Trained and managed a team of eight Engineers designing and overseeing architecture for four major versions of the docAlpha distributed document capture and classification software used by 100 corporate, industrial, government, and healthcare clients with up to 200 users each.
    [/li][li] Designed architecture and assigned, reviewed, and evaluated ten coding and software engineering tasks per week, including new feature implementations, code modifications, testing, and GUI configurations.
    [/li][li] Reviewed all assignments and provided feedback to Engineers and Junior Developers during twice-weekly development meetings.
    [/li][li] Gathered client requirements by reviewing 100 monthly support e-mails and recommending customized features during three monthly phone conferences with the five-member sales and management team.
    [/li][li] Created ten use-case scenarios and reports with feature feasibility analyses and development timetables.
    [/li][li] Implemented networking communication with Windows Communication Framework (WCF) and C#, enabling unlimited software distribution to client offices and servers.
    [/li][li] Developed a flexible custom module with C# that allowed integration with any database, document management software, and document storage software independent of data structure.
    [/li][li] Implemented and managed the TDD approach for the development.
    [/li][li] Designed and implemented product API with C#/SQL which enabled clients to control and change system settings from third-party tools.
    [/li][li] Designed and implemented a custom SQL framework that mapped database models and code classes and streamlined database maintenance operations.
    [/li][li] Developed the docAlpha licensing system while implementing security measures.
    [/li][li] Implemented the GUI with Winforms and WPF that configured the licensing system, assigned properties to the documents, and reduced image and recognition data manipulation processing time 50%.
    [/li][li] Created a pre-recognition module with C++ and C# that recognized and extracted the most crucial data from documents, reducing processing time 70%.
    [/li][li] Designed and implemented a C# server autoupdating module that enabled on-the-fly updating.
    [/li][li] Implemented system parallel algorithms that increased system processing speed on quad-core processors 250%.
    [/li][li] Developed a flexible workflow system for managing document processing scenarios.
    [/li][li] Integrated docAlpha with Active Directory, enabling clients with configured domains to migrate network rules, users, and groups
    [/li] automatically to docAlpha using the Active Directory API.

Senior Software Engineer November 2003 – July 2006
ABBYY Kiev, Ukraine

[ul]
[li] Developed, maintained, and supported two major document input and processing systems and software applications for corporate clients with C++, Visual Basic, and SQL as a part of the seven-Engineer development and integration team.
[/li][li] Redesigned and implemented the InputLine document input and processing system that processed 18K documents daily in 26 local offices used by 300 staff at the National Bank of Ukraine (NBU).
[/li][li] Developed and delivered ten InputLine training sessions to thirty bank staff each.
[/li][li] Managed company document recognition support for the eastern-European VARs (Value-Added Resellers) and wrote twenty customized modules.
[/li][li] Redesigned database communication while creating new code and preserving legacy code functionality, improving document processing speed 50%.
[/li][li] Improved and streamlined the InputLine GUI, improving operator speed 30%.
[/li][li] Implemented the document networking mechanism that enabled data and file transfers between servers and clients for the DocArchive document workflow project at NBU.
[/li][li] Designed and implemented stability features that ensured no lost data in the event of network problems or electricity shortages for docArchive and InputLine.
[/li][li] Integrated the personnel card security system for fifty users with C++.
[/li][li] Created flexible document recognition templates for projects using a special proprietary programming document template language.
[/li][li] Earned a promotion from Software Engineer to Senior Software Engineer, January 2005.
[/li][/ul]

Software Engineer April 2003 – September 2003
Innoman Gmbh Ilmenau, Germany

[ul]
[li] Created seven client websites for a provider of sales promotions and consulting solutions with PHP, JavaScript, and HTML/DHTML.
[/li][li] Created a technical report on the engineering specifications and processes needed to implement the company market analysis research software,
[/li] which helped the company win a German Government Grant.
[li] Gathered customer requirements and designed, developed, and implemented websites.
[/li][/ul]

Junior Software Engineer April 2002 – March 2003
Institute of Experimental Software Engineering Kaiserslautern, Germany

[ul]
[li] Developed and implemented the system for managing publications and gathering and storing experimental data for research using Visual Basic, C++ and SQL.
[/li][/ul]

Junior Software Engineer September 2001 – March 2003
German Institute for Artificial Intelligence Kaiserslautern, Germany

[ul]
[li] Implemented new features and seven algorithms in an AI research system using Smalltalk and C/C++ for Unix as the member of the eight-person ‘Learning Systems’ team.
[/li][/ul]

INDEPENDENT PROJECTS
Backup and Synchronization Tool October 2007 – June 2010

[ul]
[li] Designed, developed, promoted, maintained, and supported a backup and synchronization tool for windows that was capable of operating with any number of local, network, and FTP locations.
[/li][/ul]

Automated File Sharing Tool January 2008 – April 2010

[ul]
[li] Designed, developed, promoted, maintained, and supported file sharing tool that enables the user to configure drop box icons on a windows desktop to transfer riles to all configured locations.
[/li][/ul]

TECHNICAL SKILLS

[ul]
[li] Programming Languages: C#, VB, C/C++, SQL/T-SQL, UML, PHP, JavaScript, HTML, CSS
[/li][li] OS: Windows 8/ Windows7/XP/NT/98, Unix, Mac OS
[/li][li] Tools: Microsoft Visual Studio, Microsoft SQL Server 2000-2008, Subversion,
[/li][li] Technologies: .NET Framework 2.0 - 4.5, WCF, WPF, Winforms, ADO.NET, Entity framework, NUnit, Moq, Amazon Web Services
[/li][/ul]


Cover Letter:

Dear Mr. Blank ,

I am interested in the blank position with Company Name that I found at Blank .

As you can see from my resume, I have a strong and diverse background in Software Engineering and Mathematics, which I acquired through working as a Senior Software Engineer at Artsyl Technologies and ABBYY. In addition to work experience, my PhD in Mathematics allowed me to significantly develop practical analysis and computer programming skills.
I believe that I am an ideal candidate for the blank position with blank . As a Senior Software Engineer at Artsyl Technologies, I designed and oversaw architecture for four major versions of distributed document capture and classification software while managing a team of eight Software Engineers. I created, modified, updated, and supported applications using a variety of languages and tools, while gathering requirements and implementing features for clients. As a Senior Software Engineer at ABBYY, I created and supported two major document and input processing systems for corporate clients, which included implementing custom systems for the National Bank of Ukraine. Through these experiences, I developed a solid foundation of knowledge in the software development lifecycle. My high level of performance in the Mathematics and Computer Algebra classes I have taken demonstrates my thorough understanding of software engineering and mathematical concepts, which I can use to adapt to the responsibilities of this position more effectively. I am confident that my education and work experiences will allow me to quickly and successfully adjust to a fast paced business environment at blank .

Leadership and teamwork skills are valuable when applied to any task. My experience as a Senior Engineer at Artsyl Technologies has provided me with practical leadership and teamwork skills by serving as the trainer and manager of a eight person team. In this role, I reviewed all assignments and provided constant feedback to Engineers and Junior Developers while creating project documentation and timetables. As a Senior Software Engineer at ABBYY, I developed and delivered software training sessions to client staff. I have continued to develop my leadership skills by creating and licensing my own original software tools, including a backup and synchronization tool and an automated file sharing tool. I believe that these experiences will allow me to effectively interact with clients and coworkers in a corporate setting.

I look forward to speaking with you regarding the blank position with Blank . Should you have any questions, you may reach me via phone (650)XXX-XXXX or via email (XXX@gmail.com). Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,
XXXXXX

Это вам в сервисе так написали? Нет, в принципе смотрится нормально. Чисто визуально. Но возникают некоторые вопросы. Понятно, что существуют тысячи абсолютно противоречащих друг другу теорий, как должно выглядеть резюме. Но вот что мне бросилось в глаза:

  • Почему “Doctor of Mathematics”, а не PhD in Mathematics?
  • Почему нет Objective? Опять же, есть мнение, что его лучше не писать, авторы даже вроде как логически обосновывают это. Но в целом на резюме тратится секунд десять, и читающий не должен тратить это драгоценное время на то, чтобы догадаться, на какую позицию вы претендуете.
  • Почему сначала стоит “Образование”, и только потом опыт. Даже если вы подаете не на техническую позицию, а на научную, то все равно сначала должны идти достижения. Образование на первое место ставят в случае, когда опытом особо похвастаться не получается. Лично у меня, пока я не потратил секунд 20-30, было впечатление, что вы вообще нигде не работали (пока не дошел до раздела “Опыт”).
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Спасибо за комментарий!

  • Почему “Doctor of Mathematics”, а не PhD in Mathematics?

Вопрос… я не спросил, посмотрел что пишут так тоже, только реже… Лучше написать PhD in Mathematics?

  • Почему нет Objective?

Автор сервиса придерживается мнения, что эту функцию выполняет cover, насколько я понял…

  • Почему сначала стоит “Образование”, и только потом опыт.

Спасибо! Это обязательно поменяю! Как-то не обратил внимание…

Я считаю, что правильней оставить как есть, PhD - это аббревиатура, Doctor - это полученная степень, что смотритcя профессиональнее решать конечно вам, но стилистически правильнее указать полностью степень, чем сокращение. Единственное, я бы написала Doctor of Philosophy in Mathematics, но это не принципиально.

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